Children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Childhood obesity

become

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a typical sign of deteriorating public health. It is said that the government should have the

responsibillitity

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responsibility

. In my opinion, the authority is not only singled out,

parents

and schools

also

take

responsible

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for it.

Firsly

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Firstly

First

, the

goverment’s

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government's

responsibility is to ensure

the

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people

life

. They must detect a threat and disseminate information about the risk. But

beside

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the encouragement of regular exercise and healthy diets,

i

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can

harly

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hardly

see any new point in their boring campaign. They seem to ignore

this

potential epidemic. As the result, according to WTO, there are about 41 million

children

under 5 years old and 340 million

children

aged 5-19 years old

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down with

this

disease.

Secondly

, they build a giant curriculum for

children

from

young

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age in which focus on

mathmetics

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mathematics

, science and literature, lacks hours of extracurricular activities. So that students don’t have any concept or skill to take care of themselves or self-esteem whether

this

food

is good nor not.

On the other hand

,

parents

also

hold themselves accountable.

Instead

of teaching them the

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of

healthy

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meal, they buy junk

food

and processed

food

which is much faster. But they don’t know that these things contain massive sugar that not good by no means to eat it.

In addition

, the vices of

parent

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like spending too much time on

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smart phone

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smartphone

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or stay inactive

life

affect their son. Because of the imitation, it is not difficult for their child to follow their habit.

Hence

, If the

parents

change their mind,

i

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swear that childhood obesity is no longer

to

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exist . they can take up by

engage

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in sports, limit sugar intake, hit the gym, eat a balanced diet.....and especially, show your

children

how delicious the healthy

food

is, educate them the value of active

life

. In

conclution

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conclusion

, the

life

of our

children

fully depends on the

goverment

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government

, schools and

parents

. Change for the better and our younger generation will develop in the most comprehensive way.