Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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Most of the
cuntries
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countries
all around the world face the
chalange
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challenge
of protecting
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and these
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countries
take
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different
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strategies
to
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make sure
the young
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generation
is well protected. United State is
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taken
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necessary
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precautions
to take care of
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.
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of that, the government has imposed curfew in some
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of the
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country
and the youngers
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to go out after a
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, especially during
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unless, there is an adult accompanied with them. I strongly agree with
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law and we should definitely keep our children
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from the bad
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society
.
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most of the researchers carried out by many
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institutes
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number of crimes are reported during the
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, limiting the citizen to mobile during
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time
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is vital, especially for the
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which have high crime rate. Due to
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risk for
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young people to be
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victum
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victim
of
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crime. As an example, there are many incidents where
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were bullied and mugged during
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when
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traveling
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along.
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, it will always better to
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restrict
the people to travel during
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time
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unless they have their
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guardians
with them.
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way, we will be able to avoid our children to expose to
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unplesent
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unpleasant
experiences.
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, there are situations where the
teenagers
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were used for criminal activities. There are many police records indicate how young people were tricked in to break the law. There are many gangs who target
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and fresh mind and addit them to certain drug and
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them to
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conduct
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crimes
. These groups are highly
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functional
during
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time
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, best a teenager not to go out without an adult by there sight. To sum up, due to the fact that having curfew during
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time
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especially
for the
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where identifies as high risk will have
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impact on the younger
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generation
.
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action will allow the parents to look after their children and
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make sure
they will not be
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victim
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keep them safe from illegal activities.
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, I completely agree
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having
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the
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necessary
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