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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

#people #individuals #companies
E-commerce is a global business. People from all over the world, buy anything
what
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 they want. Consumers are inclining for online shopping. Many pros and cons
for
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 shopping online
to
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for
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 both individuals and
companies
.
First
 of all, advantages for individuals are finding anything at their home
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online. They do not need to go outside their house, just one click on the e-commerce
website
 and
package
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deliver
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 to them.
Second
,
payment
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the payment
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 mode is safe and secure. All their personal detail is secure with the
website
.
Next
 ,
for
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companies
, small business and shopkeepers brought
product
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the product
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 in bulk which gives them a huge discount
that is
benefit
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in
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 their business.
In addition
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this
, they
saves
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 the transportation cost.
This
 is
the
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another advantage of online shopping, shipping charges are very less or sometimes it is free of cost.
In contrast
, some experts
says
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 that online shopping may cause
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psychological
physiological
phsycological
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a phsycological
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 effect on a person. People get addicted to
e-commerce
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an e-commerce
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website
. They spend most of the time
on
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shopping and some buy anything which they do not need.
This
 will
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affect
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effect
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affect
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on
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their budget to buy random things. It just a wastage of money. While
,
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 new shopping
website
 make fraud to their client. The
companies
 who order in bulk
,
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 does not get good quality of
product
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the product
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 as
website
 make
promise
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a promise
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 to them. It
waste
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 their money and time. The
companies
 clients are ruined due to late delivery. To conclude, everything has advantages and disadvantages. If people and
companies
 use
this
 online shopping with awareness
than
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then
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 it will make benefit
to
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them.
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