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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

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E-commerce is a global business. People from all over the world, buy anything
what
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 they want. Consumers are inclining for online shopping. Many pros and cons
for
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 shopping online
to
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 both individuals and
companies
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 of all, advantages for individuals are finding anything at their home
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online. They do not need to go outside their house, just one click on the e-commerce
website
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 and
package
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deliver
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 to them.
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,
payment
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 mode is safe and secure. All their personal detail is secure with the
website
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companies
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, small business and shopkeepers brought
product
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 in bulk which gives them a huge discount
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benefit
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in
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 their business.
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, they
saves
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 the transportation cost.
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the
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another advantage of online shopping, shipping charges are very less or sometimes it is free of cost.
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, some experts
says
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 that online shopping may cause
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psychological
physiological
phsycological
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a phsycological
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 effect on a person. People get addicted to
e-commerce
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an e-commerce
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website
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. They spend most of the time
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shopping and some buy anything which they do not need.
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effect
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on
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their budget to buy random things. It just a wastage of money. While
,
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 new shopping
website
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 make fraud to their client. The
companies
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 who order in bulk
,
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 does not get good quality of
product
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the product
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 as
website
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 make
promise
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a promise
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 to them. It
waste
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 their money and time. The
companies
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 clients are ruined due to late delivery. To conclude, everything has advantages and disadvantages. If people and
companies
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 use
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 online shopping with awareness
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 it will make benefit
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them.
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