Some people are of the opinion that children should be rewarded for good behaviour. Others think they should be punished for bad behaviour. Discuss both views and give your personal opinion and reasons.

The minds of the
children
can be shaped during
early
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years of their
age
so
parents
have to be cautious about their
behaviour
. A handful of people ponder that
children
should be presented with a reward for showing the best
behaviour
while
others
postulate that they should be punished when they misbehave.
This
essay will discuss both sides of the views in detail;
however
,
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am personally in favour of motivating a
child
when they behave in
good
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manner with
others
. On the one hand, proponents of giving reward to a
child
claim that continuous encouragement will have long term benefits.
Children
’s immature minds are not aware of (what’s right and what’s wrong) ethical or moral principles so when they are motivated for a certain action
then
they get a better understanding about it and they continue to do so
thus
leading to a good habit.
For instance
, we often hear that ‘sharing is
caring’
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,
this
habit can be seen in most of the students in school where they share the meals and
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stationary
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items with their classmates. Teachers find
this
as a small step in the positive
behaviour
hence
appreciate the students for the same.
Therefore
, any reward in the form of words, patting or a present will always promote optimistic change in a
child
’s
behaviour
and habits.
On the other hand
, some
parents
believe that punishing their offspring for misbehaviour will restrict their sons and daughters from repeating
such
kinds of actions. Most of the
children
show
stubborness
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stubbornness
and do not listen to their
parents
hence
the only option left for a mother or father is to show strictness for the betterment of the
child
.
For example
, a recent study by
Children
Welfare Council in
USA
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shows that 30% of
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teenagers use abusive language and bully
others
as their actions were ignored by their
parents
during
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young
age
.
This
has
detrimental
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effect
to
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society as some of them may choose
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of various crimes due to
the
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teenage rage and anger.
Therefore
, it is paramount to teach and guide the
child
at
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early
age
even if it requires to punish or ground them. To conclude from the aforementioned arguments, I would like to infer that if a
child
is closely monitored during the younger
age
when they develop habits by encouraging and rewarding them for positive actions like respecting and helping
others
then
it will never lead to bad outcomes in future. Methods like punishment should only be considered if all the other ways to improve their
behavior
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fails.
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