Some people are of the opinion that children should be rewarded for good behaviour. Others think they should be punished for bad behaviour. Discuss both views and give your personal opinion and reasons.

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The minds of the
children
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can be shaped during
early
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years of their
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so
parents
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have to be cautious about their
behaviour
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. A handful of people ponder that
children
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should be presented with a reward for showing the best
behaviour
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while
others
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postulate that they should be punished when they misbehave.
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,
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am personally in favour of motivating a
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when they behave in
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manner with
others
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. On the one hand, proponents of giving reward to a
child
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claim that continuous encouragement will have long term benefits.
Children
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’s immature minds are not aware of (what’s right and what’s wrong) ethical or moral principles so when they are motivated for a certain action
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they get a better understanding about it and they continue to do so
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leading to a good habit.
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, we often hear that ‘sharing is
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,
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habit can be seen in most of the students in school where they share the meals and
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items with their classmates. Teachers find
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as a small step in the positive
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hence
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appreciate the students for the same.
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, any reward in the form of words, patting or a present will always promote optimistic change in a
child
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’s
behaviour
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and habits.
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, some
parents
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believe that punishing their offspring for misbehaviour will restrict their sons and daughters from repeating
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kinds of actions. Most of the
children
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show
stubborness
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stubbornness
and do not listen to their
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hence
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the only option left for a mother or father is to show strictness for the betterment of the
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.
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, a recent study by
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shows that 30% of
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teenagers use abusive language and bully
others
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as their actions were ignored by their
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during
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young
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.
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effect
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society as some of them may choose
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of various crimes due to
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teenage rage and anger.
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, it is paramount to teach and guide the
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at
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early
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even if it requires to punish or ground them. To conclude from the aforementioned arguments, I would like to infer that if a
child
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is closely monitored during the younger
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when they develop habits by encouraging and rewarding them for positive actions like respecting and helping
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it will never lead to bad outcomes in future. Methods like punishment should only be considered if all the other ways to improve their
behavior
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behaviour
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fails.
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