A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons from your own experience and examples where relevant.

In the modern era, the population is increasing rapidly as well as the demand for
animals
also
rising day by day.Some people argue that
animals
should be treated like a human being but other believe that we can use them for food or as a practical purpose.
Firstly
, every individual knows that
animals
have their own families and
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they
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have equal feelings as
human like
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anger, happiness or sadness, so they should
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like
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person and they should have
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the same

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rights as mortals.
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number of organisations come forward for saving
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animal
life
and they show big efforts to aware a
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vegitarian
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people regarding
animals
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.
On the other hand
, many people think that if all human will become
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vegitarian
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vegetarian

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than
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then

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a
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ratio of
animals
will
increases
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on the
erath
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earth

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and
this
should be a
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sign for human
life
and
then
all the
animals
will start to eat
a individuals
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individuals
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.
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, some researches show that
animals
are the best for
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of new medicine or for research purpose, in
this
way , doctors
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a positive or negative effects
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positive or negative effects
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of medicine after testing on
animals
which
also
helps to save a human
life
. In my point of view, we all should respect
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animal's
life
and their gestures and we should stop eating them for our nutrition purpose because
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number of
vegitarian
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food
avaliable
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available

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in
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the market which
give
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us a lot of vitamins, carbohydrates and
protiens
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proteins

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,
researches
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can use mammals or other creatures for
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practical purposes because
this
way
also
helps to protect
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wild
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wildlife

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life
as well as human
life
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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