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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons from your own experience and examples where relevant.

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In the modern era, the population is increasing rapidly as well as the demand for
animals
also
 rising day by day.Some people argue that
animals
 should be treated like a human being but other believe that we can use them for food or as a practical purpose.
Firstly
, every individual knows that
animals
 have their own families and
thay
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they
that
 have equal feelings as
human like
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 anger, happiness or sadness, so they should
treated
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be treated
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 like
a
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apply
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person and they should have
same
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the same
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 rights as mortals.
Moreover
, In many countries,
huge
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a huge
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 number of organisations come forward for saving
a
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an
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 animal
life
 and they show big efforts to aware a
non
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non-vegitarian
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vegitarian
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vegetarian
 people regarding
animals
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of animals
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.
On the other hand
, many people think that if all human will become
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vegitarian
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vegetarian
than
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then
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a
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the
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 ratio of
animals
 will
increases
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increase
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 on the
erath
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earth
 and
this
 should be a
danger
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dangerous
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 sign for human
life
 and
then
 all the
animals
 will start to eat
a individuals
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individuals
an individual
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.
Althought
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Although
, some researches show that
animals
 are the best for
practice
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the practice
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 of new medicine or for research purpose, in
this
 way , doctors
knows
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know
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a positive or negative effects
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positive or negative effects
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 of medicine after testing on
animals
 which
also
 helps to save a human
life
. In my point of view, we all should respect
of
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animal's
life
 and their gestures and we should stop eating them for our nutrition purpose because
huge
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a huge
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 number of
vegitarian
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vegetarian
 food
avaliable
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available
in
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on
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 the market which
give
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 us a lot of vitamins, carbohydrates and
protiens
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proteins
.
In addition
,
researches
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researchers
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 can use mammals or other creatures for
a
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apply
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practical purposes because
this
 way
also
 helps to protect
a
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wild
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wildlife
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life
 as well as human
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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