In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can it cause?

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The population
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of
cities
are rising because of different reasons and one of them is
people
who are migrating from rural areas to
cities
. There are many aspects to why
this
is happening but
i
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think the main cause of
this
phenomenon is that better opportunities and jobs are in the
cities
and
people
can reach higher standards here. Even though,
this
migration may result in increasing the population and pollution. If conditions were the same for
people
outside the
cities
this
would never have happened and you may wonder what these
conditons
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conditions
are? So, to name a few we can mention higher salaries and better educational opportunities for children.
For instance
, imagine a farmer who is working all year just to see all his work vanished by a tornado and he sees
people
who are living their everyday life in major
cities
so easily. (though it is not true and living in
cities
are not
this
easy we discussing his point of view)
Then
this
person has no other choice other than moving to a city to
privide
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provide
for his family.
On the other
hand
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we can see a concerning father for the future of his children decides to move to a city just to provide them better educational chances. So, we discussed why
cities
are so glamorous for outsiders but there is
cost
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the cost
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to
this
and the cost is the increasing number of households in the city which will result in a number of cars and
then
the pollution because of that. In conclusion,
this
mindset of migrating from rural areas is because of the
industralization
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industrialization
of different countries that encouraged
people
to move to
cities
but now it's reaching a point that needs to be controlled. So, it begs the question that can different governments control
this
issue or not.
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