Children today are too dependent on computers and electronics entertainment it would be better to encourage them to spend more time outside playing sports and games. Do you agree or disagree?

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As far as the investigations are concerned, today a vast majority of humans are confronted with many different choices in their lives, yet

this

trend had not been observed before the start of modernity in the middle of the

last

century. In the past,

people

normally had more simple activities and their alternatives

also

had been restricted just into affording necessary livelihood things

such

as providing shelter, food and or protecting their livestock. But now do really we have a lot of

options

? In my opinion,

although

in some poor areas around the world, most of the population generally have faced a minimum level of facilities and opportunities in their lives, our chances to do our best and select a wide array of offers have significantly been expanded. On the one hand, it seems that in the underdeveloped countries,

in particular

, the impoverished

third

-world ones, most of the public don't have many

options

to do. It has meant that because of increasing unleashed poverty among

people

and lacking imperative attention from their governments on

this

issue, they cannot afford unnecessary things or do favourable demands.

For instance

, in Nigeria, individuals are generally living in strenuous situations in which even provision of basic needs sometimes is impossible or very laborious.

On the other hand

, by the dawn of new technological improvements in various areas and especially by the advent of the internet, it has obviously been observed that individuals' knowledge and skills have strikingly been increased so have their choices.

In other words

, these kinds of facilities have triggered significant impacts on promoting humans' ability and their

options

Furthermore

, it is agreed that not only can we make different

options

under

such

circumstances, but

also

these alternatives have effectively affected our lifestyle so that modern lifestyle is becoming widespread and

in contrast

, the traditional one is vanishing at a high speed especially in developed countries. It means that humans' lives are becoming easier and more comfortable than in the past, so as result it leads to providing better possibilities for them to improve diverse aspects of their activity: health, education, environment and the list is endless.

Hence

, whilst many

people

who live in poor countries suffer from difficult living situations and lacking agreeable facilities and opportunities, the proportion of different alternatives for most

people

throughout the world has considerably been increased.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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13Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

391 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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