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Children today are too dependent on computers and electronics entertainment it would be better to encourage them to spend more time outside playing sports and games. Do you agree or disagree?

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As far as the investigations are concerned, today a vast majority of humans are confronted with many different choices in their lives, yet
this
 trend had not been observed before the start of modernity in the middle of the
last
 century. In the past,
people
 normally had more simple activities and their alternatives
also
 had been restricted just into affording necessary livelihood things
such
 as providing shelter, food and or protecting their livestock. But now do really we have a lot of
options
 ? In my opinion,
although
 in some poor areas around the world, most of the population generally have faced a minimum level of facilities and opportunities in their lives, our chances to do our best and select a wide array of offers have significantly been expanded.  On the one hand, it seems that in the underdeveloped countries,
in particular
, the impoverished
third
-world ones, most of the public don't have many
options
 to do. It has meant that because of increasing unleashed poverty among
people
 and lacking imperative attention from their governments on
this
 issue, they cannot afford unnecessary things or do favourable demands.
For instance
, in Nigeria, individuals are generally living in strenuous situations in which even provision of basic needs sometimes is impossible or very laborious.
On the other hand
, by the dawn of new technological improvements in various areas and especially by the advent of the internet, it has obviously been observed that individuals' knowledge and skills have strikingly been increased so have their choices.
In other words
, these kinds of facilities have triggered significant impacts on promoting humans' ability and their
options
.
Furthermore
, it is agreed that not only can we make different
options
 under
such
 circumstances, but
also
 these alternatives have effectively affected our lifestyle so that modern lifestyle is becoming widespread and
in contrast
, the traditional one is vanishing at a high speed especially in developed countries. It means that humans' lives are becoming easier and more comfortable than in the past, so as result it leads to providing better possibilities for them to improve diverse aspects of their activity: health, education, environment and the list is endless.
Hence
, whilst many
people
 who live in poor countries suffer from difficult living situations and lacking agreeable facilities and opportunities, the proportion of different alternatives for most
people
 throughout the world has considerably been increased.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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