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Some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

#expert #children #language #school #outweigh
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Foreign
language
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 plays an essential role in today's world. Most
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people
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 that it is important for pupils to learn a foreign
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 in their early childhood rather than later in the teenage years, while others argue. In
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sides before giving my opinion.
To begin
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 with, the main reason why children should start learning another
langauge
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language
 in their primary school is that
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 is the
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 where they can learn anything easily without any difficulties because they do not have any other major distractions in their lives
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 they have no
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responsibilities
 of their families and
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, they do not have major concerns about their studies.
Moreover
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, Being
biligual
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bilingual
 can help them survive in
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 competitive era more
conviniently
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conveniently
 as compared to others who just
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 one
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.
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, they have more high confidence level than others due to their multi-
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 ability which can help them to build more connections and it can
further
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 enhance their interpersonal skills.
However
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, some of the negative impacts of
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scenario
 can not be ignored.
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, in
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primary school, some children find it
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difficult
 to focus on learning different
languages
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 as they already have the pressure of learning their own
languages
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,
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, there are more than 20
languages
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 in India and out of these
language
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 3 or 4
languages
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 are part of the academic
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curriculum
 depends on the state, a person is living.
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,
this
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 escalates the stress on the youngsters for focusing on foreign
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.
Therefore
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, they should learn it later in
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secondary
schools
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.
Secondly
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, learning
new
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language
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 is always
time
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 consuming, they get less
time
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 for concentrating on other extra
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curricular
curriculum
activites
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activities
 which impacts
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their overall growth. By learning it in secondary
schools
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, they already have developed their interests in extra
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curriculum
curricular
activites
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activities
 in their primary
schools
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, so they just need enough to practice which they can arrange easily arrange as they do not have to spend all their
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focusing on enhancing the foreign
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. In conclusion, I think, youth should learn another
language
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 in their primary
schools
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 because those are the years where children can grasp the knowledge more comfortably and become the best versions of themselves and it is
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 going to help them to be more successful in their lives.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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