Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spent most of the time indoors and have little exposure to the nature. How important is it for children to learn to understand and appreciate nature? Give reasons of your answers and give relevant example of your experience.

Recently ,
children
do not have more and enough knowledge about outdoors
nature
. They have to spend their times indoors because of modernization that makes environments busy . Understanding
nature
is seemed essential for
toddler
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a toddler
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in countries . In the following essay , the reasons for
this
idea will be discussed . Creating some positive traits in
children
personalities would be the most powerful merit of seeming important to learn about
humor
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for
children
. Apparently , if
children
are not
a
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knowledgeable people in their environments or if they do not know about events and happenings that occur outdoors, they have never been familiar with outdoors' problems or issues and when they go outside they can not manage their problems because they do not know anything about
nature
.
Moreover
, if
children
learn to understand
nature
, they will be understanding, soft or kind-hearted because of understanding problems in their societies .
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instance , a boy who stays more time at home can not be sensitive about humans' emotions and he is selfish because he or just knows about his own targets and tends to
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his golds without knowing other feelings .
In contrast
, for
children
who understand their surroundings , other people are necessary for them and some positive behaviours will appear in these
children
. The
second
reason for having a positive view about being profitable for
children
to know
nature
would be the fact that , improvement and development in countries'
future
rely on
children
. It is believed that
children
create a
future
and it will not be possible unless
children
are aware of
nature
.
Furthermore
, if
children
are conscious about their environment they can reach experience.There fore , their responsibilities will be increased and can build a perfect
future
for societies . As an example , if
children
see poverty in countries , they will have been decreased
this
problem by the
next
20 years but if they do not know about poverty they will not be able to manage it in their far
future
life . In conclusion , despite the fact that there are some advantages in modern life , it causes of unwary in
children
, appraising some negative influential in their personalities and societies'
future
.
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