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Nowadays more and more older people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are the solutions?

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Finding a
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 is becoming more challenging these days making it difficult for the older workforce to compete with the younger ones for the same
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 positions.
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 essay will explore these challenges and come up with some solutions. It is true that the global population is growing at a fast speed increasing the need for more employment opportunities in some part of the world. The younger generation is more
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 savvy and are young and have more energy.
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, these two characteristics make them become more employable in some
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 that need physical strength and access to
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. For these reasons, older people would face lots of barriers
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 those
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.
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, it is very hard for a 50 yo to find a
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 at McDonald as opposed to recent high school graduates due to the fact that working in
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 high-speed workplace needs someone very young and energetic. To tackle these problems, older people should look for
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 that need more work
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 or some skills that need years of
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.
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, coaching a sports team needs
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 and knowledge more than energy and
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.
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 to get hired as a coach one only need to be an old team player. Another solution will be to self-train in the area that needs improvement. For ,example working on some computer skills if someone needs to work with a computer makes a person more employable. To sum up, it is very difficult for the older population to compete with younger ones in some
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. The problem is older
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 seekers have less energy and
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 ex[perience than the younger group. To solve
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 problem they should look for
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 that need more
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 or to improve their skills and stay up to date.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intergenerational competition
  • Age discrimination
  • Adaptability
  • Hiring practices
  • Workforce diversity
  • Upskilling
  • Lifelong learning
  • Flexible working arrangements
  • Ageism
  • Technological proficiency
  • Productivity concerns
  • Diverse skillsets
  • Legislative protection
  • Employment equity
  • Biases
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