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Animals are in danger of extinctions. Some people say we should protect only those animal which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree ?

#animals #danger #extinctions #people #humans
In
this
 modern era,
beast
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are
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is
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 almost entered
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at in
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in
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an
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 alarming
ratein
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retain
rate in
othe
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the
word
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world
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 of risk of
disapperence
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disappearance
 in the earth. The main reason for human irrefutably.
However
, a fair amount of people say we should save
thease
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these
animals
whoch
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which
 are helpful to the population. I strongly
disahree
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disagree
disagreed
 with
this
 statement because
everty
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every
 creature
have
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has
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a
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the
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 rights to live
in
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on
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 the earth. On the one hand, there are many reasons
to
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I personally against
with
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this
 trend.
Firstly
, one of the main reason of
animals
are
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is
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 in insecurity of
eliminate
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eliminating
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 by
human
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the human
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 race, natural disaster,
calamidy
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calamity
. Anyhow, we should
takecare
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take care
 of each and every animal species.
Moreover
, if vary rare
animals
 will eradicate, we never recreate
in
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them in
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 the future
such
 as
Dinosar
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Dinosaur
. Wild
animals
also
 have
a
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the
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 rights to live in the plant look like human but many optimistic persons are said we should keep from harsh
animals
 which are only beneficial and others remaining is not
necessery
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necessary
 to protect.
For example
, the Indian government is
atken
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taken
taking
 many steps to preserve wild
animals
 especially Tiger.
On the other hand
,
a
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 public and the ministry both are together to conserve for all
animals
 not only gainful but
also
 ungainful.
for example
, many developed countries are being protected
animals
 by zoos and We can see that many
reare
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rare
 species
animals
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of animals
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 are kept in
the
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apply
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zoos.
In other
words
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Dinosar
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Dinosaur
 had been
disappering
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disappearing
during
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for
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few
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a few
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decade
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decades
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 before while those people would save now
this
 generation have a chance to see
instead
 of watching movies. To conclude,
animals
 is one of the
saver
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savers
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 of
environment
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the environment
an environment
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as a result
 forest and hills are looking very attractive and fruitful. We have to do for
secure
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 to the ruination
animals
 because future generation people will see and know about all
animals
.
Recend
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Recent
 years more beasts had extinction without proper measures.
Therefore
, Today folks are should be saving all kinds of
animals
 species.
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