Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

It is undeniable that involving various activities throughout high school time is a valuable experience for teenagers. In my opinion,
teenagers gain some considerable benefits from working unpaid during education, there are some possible drawbacks to
mandatory program. Students who participate in a period of voluntary
during their education time can benefit extremely in many tasks.
of all, it helps them to experience different activities which improve their knowledge and
academic qualifications. It is undoubtedly vital for high school students to gain some professional
before graduating which could significantly motivate them to opt for a wide range of occupations.
, communicating with different
especially aiding the elderly and doing some valuable community
outside the home, helps the young
get to know more about society. It certainly improves their social
which makes them responsible citizens.
On the other hand
, there may be some disadvantages if the young
take part in
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obligatory unpaid community
, the program must be well planned in order not to conflict with their expected study routine. Lack of time and concentration on doing their homework and school program might affect their educational achievement.
, some voluntary
may put the youngsters at potential risks. They may be in great peril while being alone in an unidentified place with an unknown individual. So, advanced management by authorities and
parents’ supervision on every social
is essential to ensure the security of volunteers exclusively. In conclusion, despite some drawbacks, I believe that involving
community unpaid works could help the young
to gain precious
and experiments which would be beneficial both for them and the society.
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