In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Although
agriculture methods have progressed over the
last
century, there are many
people
who are still hungry around the world. There are various and complex reasons for
food
shortage in some
countries
leading to
starving
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all over the world.
First
of all, poverty is one of the main factors responsible for global hungry.
Food
seems sufficient only for
the
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rich
people
. Unfortunately, poor
people
have neither any land to grow crops for their
food
nor enough money to purchase it from the market.
Secondly
, climate change particularly causes famine in some poor
countries
of Asia and Africa. Unforeseen prolonged summer droughts and devastating flood in spring have seriously impacted some regions in the world which unfortunate farmers cannot grow adequate crops
in
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their land. There are several solutions to solve
this
problem.
First
of all, the government in poor
countries
should allocate special financial support to poor
people
in order to have enough
food
. Rich
countries
should share their surplus
food
with poor
countries
which are suffering from the lack of
food
.
Secondly
, the government should invest in proper education programs to help farmers to learn about
climate
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crisis in their regions and
also
how to use modern agriculture facilities to prevent
food
shortage and starving eventually. These programs must set all main goals regularly to moderate the effect of severe climate change and lack of modern farming knowledge respectively. In conclusion, hunger is still distressing many
people
in
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the globe which can be controlled by precise decisions made by the government and international aid.
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