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many people believe that educational standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solution to it.

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Some people believe that education standards are not suitable in recent years. In my overall perspective, there are several approaches to tackle the problem which will be discussed in the following essay.
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 of all, one of the most significant obstacles to learning in schools today is coach do not have enough permission to force
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 to study.
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, Physical punishments are necessary for rude
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,
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, the teacher cannot control the class. The
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 problem would be, increasing the number of miscellaneous classes
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 as dance music and theatre
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 of paying attention to significant and important lessons
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 as Mathematics and English. So, it has caused
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academic failure and we cannot expect the
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 generation to be intelligent. Eventually, the class attendance is replaced by online class or self-education software without training, keeping pupil
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 the right way. so, we have witnessed which undergraduate graduated with low grades from school. And it will affect culture and economics and it is the most important result of sub education. And on the other ,side there are several approaches to tackle the problem. Definitely, one of them is that supervisor force
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 even by punishment to study. By the way, not only teachers can control the rude
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 and classes but
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, they can increase the student’s attention and higher degrees could be the result. The
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 approach would be, pay attention to significant practice
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 as Mathematics and English. it is obvious that the more time for important lessons sets out the less low grades.
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, monthly or weekly assessment can help parents and teachers to investigate their
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 and their ability,
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 they can easily recognize their weakness in lessons. The
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 way which could be the most effective solution is encouragement and rewards. Encouragement not only can increase the confidence between student and teacher but
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can cause the promotion.
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, in the conclusion, to create opportunities for
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 to learn a wide range of skills, not only education system and technique methods should change but
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 some encouragement methods need to add.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Numeracy
  • Literacy
  • Standardized testing
  • Economic disparities
  • Inequality
  • Underprivileged communities
  • Immediate gratification
  • Foundational subjects
  • Professional development
  • Holistic approach
  • Comprehensive reforms
  • Socio-economic background
  • Engaged
  • Traditional methods
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