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Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #railways #roads
It is clear to notice that
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last
 tens
years
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 the number of
people
 flying by
the
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plane is increased
,
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 because the prices are fallen. In
this
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 we try to show
a
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 positive and negative
sides
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 of
this
 phenomenon. On the one hand, growth of moving by plane has some benefits for us. Possibly, it solves a car problem. To give a clear example, most Kazakhstan
people
traveled
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 by car, so in some cities
such
 as Almaty was a huge car traffics.
However
, today when the cost
flying
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 is accessible, there is less traffics in big cities. The
second
 benefit is
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 development of tourism.
For instance
, when everyone has
possibility
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the possibility
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 to buy
aviatickets
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via tickets
 it may improve tourism which is useful for
economy
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the economy
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 of
country
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the country
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 and
development
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the development
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 of
people
.
On the other hand
, the given trend possibly leads to other problems. The
first
 is a high
consumering
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consumer
consuming
consumers
 of petrol. It means that
people
 will increase getting of oil
than
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 can cause different pollutions and other environmental issues. The
second
 negative side is a risk of
catastrophy
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catastrophe
.
For example
, the rise of flying leads to increasing the
amount
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 of aviacatastrophies, as it was in Kazakhstan in 2020.
Thus
, the given trend can be dangerous. In conclusion, today because of
droping
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dropping
 prices of
aviatickets
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via tickets
 a lot of
people
 can
easely
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easily
 travel around the world.
However
, the trend has advantages
such
 as decreasing
of
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the traffics and development of tourism as well as disadvantages like environmental challenges and risk of aviacatastrophies.
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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