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In many countries, school children are required to wear school uniforms. Do you think this should be enforced in all schools? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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School
uniforms
 have been a part of most private
schools
 in the country whereas most to all of the public
schools
 do not have
this
 requirement. I strongly advocate imposing
school
uniforms
 as mandatory throughout the
schools
 in the country The
first
 key issue that could be diminished by proposing
school
uniforms
 is bullying. As evidence states that in most of the
schools
, based on the appearance of a student, they are categorized as 'popular' or 'nerds', which after a point leads to constant bullying. By enforcing
uniforms
, the appearance remains constant throughout the
school
. Apart from
this
, it
also
 reduces the time spent on picking clothes every day and develops a sense of responsibility in a child to maintain or iron their
uniform
, and polish shoes every day. Despite
this
, there is a downside. It could be potentially difficult to maintain one type of
uniform
 in a place that has extreme weather conditions and would lead to being expensive if parents have to purchase different types of
uniform
 for every season. On many, occasions it could
also
 turn out to be difficult for households with both parents working to maintain a
school
uniform
. To conclude, I still strongly support the idea for imposing
school
uniforms
 provided if it is provided by the
schools
 themselves and not to be an expense for the parents especially in public
schools
.
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