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In many countries, school children are required to wear school uniforms. Do you think this should be enforced in all schools? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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uniforms
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 have been a part of most private
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 in the country whereas most to all of the public
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 do not have
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 requirement. I strongly advocate imposing
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uniforms
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 as mandatory throughout the
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 in the country The
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 key issue that could be diminished by proposing
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uniforms
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 is bullying. As evidence states that in most of the
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, based on the appearance of a student, they are categorized as 'popular' or 'nerds', which after a point leads to constant bullying. By enforcing
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, the appearance remains constant throughout the
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. Apart from
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, it
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 reduces the time spent on picking clothes every day and develops a sense of responsibility in a child to maintain or iron their
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, and polish shoes every day. Despite
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, there is a downside. It could be potentially difficult to maintain one type of
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 in a place that has extreme weather conditions and would lead to being expensive if parents have to purchase different types of
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 for every season. On many, occasions it could
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 turn out to be difficult for households with both parents working to maintain a
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uniform
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. To conclude, I still strongly support the idea for imposing
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uniforms
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 provided if it is provided by the
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 themselves and not to be an expense for the parents especially in public
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.
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