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Many young children have unsupervised access to the internet and are using the internet to socialise with others. This can lead to a number of dangerous situations which can be threatening for children. What problems do children face when going online without parental supervision? How can these problems be solved?

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In today's
world
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 many
parents
 are struggling with the information
which
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given to their
children
 by the internet, which can lead their
children
 to some negative aspects of that. in
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 I would argue about some dangers of the
web
 world and the ways that we can prevent
it
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. One of the considerable problems is that a huge amount of the information on the
web
 is not suitable for any ages. Some websites are provided unsuitable data which can affect
children
's mind, which has dire consequences for them. Some of the porn websites, violent news and so on can be easily accessible for them. The
second
 problem of
that is
 the
web
 surface
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are
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 full of unknown persons which have dangerous decides. The variety of robbers make the world
web
 unsustainable and every one of them follow a specific way to earn money. For ,example some of them whit fake account in social media start to make the relationship with teenagers and after some
time
 they want to earn money from them. One solution to the problem is to limit the
children
's
web
time
. It means that if
parents
 limit their access they will have no extra
time
 to spend their free
time
 on that. As
result
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 they spend their
time
 for some essential works
such
 as research and do their homework, which prevents them to visit some unnecessary sites. Another practical way to solve
this
 issue is to provide some other entertainments far from their digital devices.
Parents
 must create some fun
time
 with them which brings many advantages. watching movie with your family, playing board games can help
parents
 to benefit from both improve
children
's happiness and keep them far from social media.
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  • unsupervised access
  • socialise online
  • inappropriate content
  • psychologically harmful
  • cyberbullying
  • mental health consequences
  • online predators
  • exploitation
  • privacy risks
  • personal information
  • identity theft
  • privacy breaches
  • time management issues
  • excessive use
  • academic performance
  • physical activity
  • unhealthy lifestyles
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