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Nowadays more and more older people compete with young people for the same jobs. What can be the reasons for this? What would you suggest as a solution?

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Recently , old people have felt rivalry with youth in the same works because of fearing to miss their jobs . In the following essay , the reason for
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younge
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young
younger
 people in the same job positions would be the fact that
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old people argue that having experience in the businesses and industrialization is the most valuable and essential matter in the companies or job positions successfully . While sometimes it is believed that stranger and younger workers can be more beneficial than
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the older
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one
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.
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 , a staff who is 50 years old have use full experiences rather than a younger person in one
work place
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 because of working a long time in the
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 field . So ,
oldester
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oldest
 seem themselves in
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competition with
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 or teenager in the similarity works that they intend to indicate their abilities and responsibilities . I would advise that , if some kinds of job
possitions
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positions
 which are suitable for older staff like management and giving some responsibilities that need the new fresh
workers
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such
work
 travels in organizations to youth are established , feeling competition from elderly will
reduced
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 . There fore , they will not worry about
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loosing
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 their jobs . In conclusion , in my view , being old workers worry about
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loosing
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 their positions in the same
work place
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 is the reason for feeling rivalry in the same
work
 environment by old men or women .
Also
 , dividing proper responsibilities between youth and other staff would be a reasonable solution .
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