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Ielts Internet users as percentage of population 1999 - 2009

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 access in three various regions of the world over a ten years period from 1999 to 2009. Overall, these lines clearly show that the usage of
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 has increased
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 countries for
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 period.
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 of Canada has the greatest change in
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 of users.
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, Americans and Canadians have a very similar upward trend. Interestingly, there is
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 least change in Japan. In 1999, there was about 5
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 of
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 using
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 in Japan. The numbers are moderately higher in
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 two countries that year. The proportion of Japanese usage constantly went up between 1999 and 2009. More than half of humans both in the USA and Canada got
internet
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 connection in 2005. By
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2009, the lowest percentage 40% of
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 users
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 in Japan, whereas we can see a significant rise to about 70% of web users in the USA. The dramatic leap was in Canada, almost 100% of people
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