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To succeed in a business, one needs to be good at maths. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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To become
success
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 people in
business
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,
maths
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 is an important subject that required their best skills. It is indisputable that
maths
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 is the core system in
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business
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.
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, there are several factors that helping the
business
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 leads to
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victorious
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. It is a tendency to believe that
business
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 is
rerated
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 to economic
systems
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 which the
company
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 needs to deal with marketing and account management
systems
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. These types of
systems
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 rely on mathematic and
number
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 calculation.
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, worldwide
business
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such
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 as Loreal
company
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 hired the employee that
specialise
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 in math to manage their stock market
systems
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.
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, there are several factors excluding
maths
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 that support the
business
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 and lead the
company
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 to the successful.
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, the creative idea is the point of knowledge that makes the unique concept in each
business
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 which increases the chance of customer’s attention in the market. 
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, science and technologies are
also
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 important for the
business
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 in terms of advances
technical
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 and logical
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 in
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company
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the company
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. It may reduce the cost and maintain the quality of products in
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business
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the business
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.
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, many
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 companies are likely to be better in quality concept compared to others. In conclusion, to succeed in a
business
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 needs
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 combination of knowledge. I strongly disagree that it needs to be good at only
maths
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 but I believe that good
business
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need
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 a complex knowledge and effective management to be
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a success
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success
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 in the society.
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