These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
It is fact that both males and females take the responsibility
euqally
for their babies. Recently, it becomes more usually to see fathers looking after children. Correct your spelling
equally
This
state can emerge for several reasons.
Firstly
, it can be reluctance that rises because of staying at home for a long time . To be more clear, sometimes pregnant women
take maternity leave during pregnancy, they can also
sustain it for two or three years. However
, some of them are willing to go on their career after birth. Moreover
, during this
period, they need more moral support, especially by
their husbands. Change preposition
from
For example
, if a woman is getting to have a baby, she will be more emotional and needy, therefore
, her mate has to stand by her and to
show his love by taking care in these times. Fix the infinitive
apply
Secondly
, since last
century Correct article usage
the last
women
have been aware of their rights thanks to Correct article usage
the feminism
feminism
movement. Replace the word
feminist
This
ideology supports that, both genders should be equal by
every Change preposition
in
aspects
Change to a singular noun
aspect
such
as social, political, economical
. Feminism Replace the word
economic
change
the population's mind Change the verb form
changes
to
a more contemporary way. Already, people accept the equality between male and female as normal and significant. Change preposition
in
That is
why,
partners take charge of Remove the comma
apply
babycare
together. Correct your spelling
baby care
For instance
, if the mother has work
, the man can take Change the verb form
worked
a
paternity leave to help his wife.
It is great to see people's view is getting developed day by day in most countries, and it is considered ordinary that, fathers look after children while mothers are at Remove the article
apply
work
, but is it always positive? To my mind, as long as it doesn't take more time, it is a useful idea because men,
must understand their responsibilities to children like Remove the comma
apply
women
, since if this
period lasts too long, it will have a negative effect on both sides. For example
, a woman will be less interested in her child and a man will not be able to spend time at work
. This
can undermine the moral values of the
society.
In conclusion, the moral needs of Correct article usage
apply
women
and change of peoples' mind because of feminism are motives of some modern behaviors
Change the spelling
behaviours
such
as a man looking after a child while a woman is at work
. However
, this
improvement can have a detrimental effect on the community in the long term.Submitted by banucicekqurbanova on
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