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many people prefer to stay in the same field work for the lifetime , while other people change their field work. discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #field #work #lifetime #change
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At present, everyone is working. There are lots of different reasons why
people
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work
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; Some of them works because they like working or, some of them works due to the family. Plus, while some
people
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 do the same job for a very long time, some
people
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 prefer to change their jobs frequently. I prefer changes in
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field
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fieldwork
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work
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 to stay in the same
field
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. Working in
differnt
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different
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field
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work
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 provides many benefits to workers which you may not know. They had more various working
skills
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 than
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. When they became a new worker of their new
work
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, they
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 had to learn new
skills
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 which they have not learned before.
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, they got new
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every time that they moved.
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, they tended to not be
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expertise
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 on each
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 they have done.
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, to be in the same
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field
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fieldwork
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work
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 for a long time
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 had advantages. they had large experiences on their
work
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 so, they easily become an expert
on
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 their fields. Ultimately, when they are very good at their
work
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, the increase
of
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 salary is not hard to be reached. Yet, they had
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 working
skills
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 than
people
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 who worked in a myriad of firms. To conclude, I am convinced that human who usually changes
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field
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work
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 had more pros. They had a variety of
skills
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 which will be useful in the future working life.
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, no matter what styles of
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 which you prefer, the most important thing is that you should love your
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 and
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 with your heart.
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, your
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 life will always be happy.
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