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In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four year old, while in other they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do your agrees with either of these views?

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Mostly in Asian ,countries
children
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 start formal
education
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 at four years old ,
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 it starts only at seven or eight Western Countries. Both the ideas
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 have some advantages and disadvantages.
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 of all starting formal
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 at four years old gives a
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 of free
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 to
parents
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 which they can utilize in their work.
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 for formal
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children
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 go to
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 at least 5 days a week and when
children
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 are in
school
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parents
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 can focus on their official duties and responsibilities. If
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 are able to spend more
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 on work
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 they can have better job opportunities. Starting early formal
education
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also
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 helps
children
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 to socialize and learn discipline.
Children
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 learn to share things and ideas which makes them more social.
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 learning manners from teachers makes them more disciplined. On the
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contrary
children
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 have a
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 of mental pressure after attending
school
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 which may make them dull On the other ,hand starting formal
education
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 late at seven or eight gives them enough
time
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 to prepare mentally and physically. When they go to
school
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 late, they are well prepared for the challenges they may face in
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. Until seven or eight years
children
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 learns a
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 of things in a home or child care which makes them easy for formal
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.
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 sending
children
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 late, costs a
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 of
parents
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time
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 .If
children
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 are sent to
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 late,
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parents
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 might have to quit their jobs. In conclusion, starting a formal
education
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 early can save
parents
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time
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 but may affect mental and physical health. On the other ,beginning formal
education
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 later can make
children
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 mentally and physically strong but it might cost the job of their
parents
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