In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four year old, while in other they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do your agrees with either of these views?

Mostly in Asian ,countries
children
start formal
education
at four years old ,
however
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it starts only at seven or eight Western Countries. Both the ideas
,
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have some advantages and disadvantages.
First
of all starting formal
education
at four years old gives a
lot
of free
time
to
parents
which they can utilize in their work.
For example
for formal
education
children
go to
school
at least 5 days a week and when
children
are in
school
parents
can focus on their official duties and responsibilities. If
parents
are able to spend more
time
on work
then
they can have better job opportunities. Starting early formal
education
also
helps
children
to socialize and learn discipline.
Children
learn to share things and ideas which makes them more social.
Further
learning manners from teachers makes them more disciplined. On the
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contrary
children
have a
lot
of mental pressure after attending
school
which may make them dull On the other ,hand starting formal
education
late at seven or eight gives them enough
time
to prepare mentally and physically. When they go to
school
late, they are well prepared for the challenges they may face in
school
. Until seven or eight years
children
learns a
lot
of things in a home or child care which makes them easy for formal
education
.
However
sending
children
late, costs a
lot
of
parents
time
.If
children
are sent to
school
late,
then
parents
might have to quit their jobs. In conclusion, starting a formal
education
early can save
parents
time
but may affect mental and physical health. On the other ,beginning formal
education
later can make
children
mentally and physically strong but it might cost the job of their
parents
.
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