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Some people think that those who start a career and keep working in that same field for years are going to have a more satisfying work life than those who keep changing jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a very well-known study that concluded that it takes 10,000 hours of practice to master any new ability. So, some level of consistency seems to be necessary to succeed in any
field
 of work.
However
, in my opinion, succeeding does not always
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more satisfying
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. Professionals that stay in the same
field
 will have the opportunity to specialize,
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build a strong network and
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acquire relevant experiences that may lead to promotion opportunities.
This
 type of person will probably have a more stable financial life,
therefore
 will be able to plan and invest in long term goals.
On the other hand
, someone
that is
 constantly changing jobs acquire soft skills that are precious nowadays. The capability to rapidly adapt to new environments, to be a fast learner, to communicate to a variety of types of personalities and generations. These professionals are fearless, and
this
 can be liberating. Someone with
this
 type of personality will not stay in a job or even in the same
field
 out of fear. They are more likely to be proactive in looking for opportunities that bring personal satisfaction. To conclude, keep working in the same
field
 can bring stability, but not always
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. So, there is a higher probability that a professional that changes constantly would be happier.
Also
,
this
 type of personality is more aligned with the future and will probably be capable to adapt when it´s needed. They will probably suffer less with the fast pace changings that are happening and will be able to innovate and reinvent themselves whenever is needed.
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