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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In today's world, competition has grown so much that
people
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 are going abroad for their studies. It could have both positive and negative impact. In the recent period,
people
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 choose to
study
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 outside their
country
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 to get better exposure in terms of knowledge and lifestyle. There could be multiple reasons as well for a person to go outside their
country
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 to
study
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. In the past,
people
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 tend to
study
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 till higher secondary and start working in the firm. Due to the education , a development it's very difficult to get
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 after higher secondary that why
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 opt for better education.
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, the competition has increased so much that they want to
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 in the best university to get better knowledge and
jobs
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 in the future.
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,
people
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 want to have global exposure of the
jobs
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 just not in their own
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 but
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 in the foreign. In spite of
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, there are some disadvantages of
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 going out of the
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 to
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, if
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 who have extraordinary skills choose to go out of the
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 for
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,
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 could lead to the less skilled worker in the
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. Because of ,
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 the
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 won't develop rapidly,
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 there are reasons
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 as reservation to certain caste in the field of
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, due to which
people
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 tend to choose other countries for a
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 where there is no reservation on the basis of caste. In conclusion,
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 would say there could any many advantages and disadvantages if
people
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 decide to go out of the
country
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 to research and to work.
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, in the ,past there aren't many opportunities as we have now,
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,
people
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 select the best opportunity they have.
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