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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that whether
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place
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 of confinement is
the
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 good
penalty
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 for captives, not.
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, some people think that jail is the best
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 for criminals. I strongly agree with
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 statement and I will be mentioning my points in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with, there are many reasons for lockup is the super location who
law breaker
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 when they are done any misconduct activity while the court is given
long
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 time stay inside
house
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.
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, the prison is given the chance
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the culprits to change their
behavior
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 and mind.
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,
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 do not see the outside world and they do not know about what is happening in the outside
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 means they are stayed more years in order to they have a chance to do rectify their mistake and crime.
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, many offenders are changed their
criminality
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 mind when after
relese
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release
 their jail
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, they will not do any other misconduct in their remaining life.
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,
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place
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 of confinement is given a particular time for offender will realise their lawlessness from themselves in
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 the prison main purpose for the
law breaker
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lawbreaker
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 should change their misdeed attitude and know about their misconduct.
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, in India government has more
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 of confinement for
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lawbreaker
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 and they are given
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 who the prisoner put into where youth custody institution
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 their country people are scared before doing any atrocity. To conclude,
undoubtdely
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undoubtedly
 a mistake person should be punished it depends on their atrocity-based and no one escape from
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discipline
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 action. In ,addition we can not give the deadly discipline for a small case person but we could put
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them into
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youth custody institution in order to they will realise their case and they are able to live a good life and irrefutably
penalty
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 institution can only reduce the misdeed ratio.
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