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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Do you agree or disagree?

#prison #punishment #criminals
It is often argued that whether
place
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 of confinement is
the
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 good
penalty
 for captives, not.
However
, some people think that jail is the best
place
 for criminals. I strongly agree with
this
 statement and I will be mentioning my points in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are many reasons for lockup is the super location who
law breaker
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lawbreaker
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 when they are done any misconduct activity while the court is given
long
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 time stay inside
house
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.
Firstly
, the prison is given the chance
who
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apply
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the culprits to change their
behavior
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 and mind.
Secondly
,
their
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 do not see the outside world and they do not know about what is happening in the outside
this
 means they are stayed more years in order to they have a chance to do rectify their mistake and crime.
For example
, many offenders are changed their
criminality
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criminal
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 mind when after
relese
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release
 their jail
penalty
as a result
, they will not do any other misconduct in their remaining life.
Furthermore
,
place
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 of confinement is given a particular time for offender will realise their lawlessness from themselves in
another words
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 the prison main purpose for the
law breaker
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lawbreaker
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 should change their misdeed attitude and know about their misconduct.
For instance
, in India government has more
place
 of confinement for
law breaker
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lawbreaker
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 and they are given
penalty
 who the prisoner put into where youth custody institution
as a result
 their country people are scared before doing any atrocity. To conclude,
undoubtdely
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undoubtedly
 a mistake person should be punished it depends on their atrocity-based and no one escape from
this
discipline
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 action. In ,addition we can not give the deadly discipline for a small case person but we could put
into
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them into
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youth custody institution in order to they will realise their case and they are able to live a good life and irrefutably
penalty
 institution can only reduce the misdeed ratio.
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