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QUESTIONS: WITH A FAST PACE OF MODERN LIFE MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE TURNING TOWARDS FASTFOOD FOR THEIR MAIN MEALS. DO YOU THINK ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE ADVANTAGES?

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In today's world, people are so busy in their life that they don't like cooking
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 at home.
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 could happen due to their busy work schedule. I think the disadvantages of eating
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 outside outweigh the advantages.
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, eating outside saves time but it's not healthy. It can later cause serious health issues. There are advantages
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 as you save a lot of time, which in turn can be used for other activities.
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, they can drop by any nearby restaurants or can order
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 by delivery. Since the Fastfood consist of oil, preservatives ,sugar in a very large amount it can cause serious obesity in the long run.
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, if you cook a home meal you can prepare the
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 according to your taste and health. I think
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 of eating
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 outside one should cook
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 at home.
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, eating fast
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 is
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 bad for the environment. Since many restaurants use plastics for takeout's which in turn is exposed to the environment and create garbage.
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 , People tend to order so much
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 in restaurants which they are not able to eat and
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 they throw it away which is bad for the environment as well. In conclusion, I think eating fast
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 is not only bad for your health but
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 for your surroundings. So in the end, I would say we should make our own
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 and eat it rather than going outside and order.
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