Many People Believe That Social Networking Sites Have A Huge Negative Impact On Both Individuals And Society

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Nowadays,
internet
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the internet
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has revolutionized the world. It is considered by many that social networking
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like
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has many negative effects on both
people
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and society. While I agree there may be some drawbacks of social networking sites to
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society, I believe it comes with many beneficial impacts to
people
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as well. With the new technology and development of social networking sites,
people
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now could make
connection
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a connection
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with
people
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in a very convenient way, it
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people
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closer and easier to access different opinion of the public.
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, it only takes one click to send
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instant text messages and free voice calls to
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.
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, those who often have a busy work schedule could easily manage their time to stay connected and updated with the latest happenings in the lives of their dear ones.
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, the video call which used to be a huge breakthrough of social networking service could allow
people
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to meet and see
others
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from all over the world without the need to get on a plane and travelling.
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, it may have some detrimental effects
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the connection between
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and their society. As
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nowadays are so used to communicating with
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in the virtual world. They prefer to stay at home rather
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going out to meet
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in person as well as losing some meaningful bonding time with the community.
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,
people
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may no longer celebrate the festival with
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physical but sending greetings through
social
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the social
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media
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.
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, the relationship and support within the community will
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.
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, it is noticeable there are many
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and harassment events over the media
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, which could eventually lead to
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suffering from mental health issues. To conclude, it is clear to see there are both positives and negative effects on social networking
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. In my opinion, the benefits
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the drawbacks and it is essential to keep a balance
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between
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virtual networking and meaningful real connection with
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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