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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interesting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While some people argue that youngsters should pay attention to all the listed courses in their curriculum, others believe they should focus on the subjects in which they succeed and are of their interest. Even though learning a lot might help
students
 in some ways, I am of the latter opinion. Nowadays, an increasing number of people support the idea of learning every course provided in-depth at school.
Firstly
, they believe
this
 approach may help
students
 enlarge their horizons and be educated in many fields,
as a result
, teenagers can have a clear view of their desires when it comes to choosing a profession.
Secondly
, supporters believe that if
students
 were familiar with the concepts about various aspects of life,
such
 as physics, art, economics, they would not only be good at their professional life, but
also
 they could handle problems effectively in their personal daily life.
However
, opponents of
this
 argument, including me,
instead
 of learning everything, youngsters should concentrate on learning what they are able
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 love. When
students
 only focus on what they really care about, they start to feel confident and by
this
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 the study hours tend to be more efficient. Teenagers of similar tastes can form groups, and as they feel more open to one another, they actively participate in the classes.
Also
, having classes only which teenagers are capable of doing will help them to not lag behind their peers, contrary they will have a chance to learn what they really can. To conclude, despite some argue that school-aged children should learn all their classes, I support the idea that human beings have some limitations of their capabilities
,
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 so that
students
 should only focus
what
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 they choose.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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