In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

A healthy diet is part of a healthy lifestyle.
Although
many
people
believe that, processed
food
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a place in every nation and it takes over our traditional
food
.
Besides
, it has many negative impacts on individuals
along with
civilization. There are several reasons for
such
a situation and
also
few
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visible influences
too
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.
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essay will substantiate my views in the following paragraphs with relevant examples. To embark with my the key reasons to support my ideology
is
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that
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, modern generation and advanced technology. It is not
neglectable
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the
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fact they junk
food
has a delicious taste it has various spices
together with
an excessive amount of cheese. Despite the fact, it has fatty
acid
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which
not
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good for the human body.
Firstly
, in
this
contemporary era, the masses do not have enough time to prepare healthy
food
at home.
For example
,
people
tend to work extra hours in the office there are several reasons for that
such
as
,
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earning more money,
give
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bread and butter to their family, or it could be a genuine reason that they have piled up work.
Hence
, they ended up having outside
food
.
On the other hand
, having an excessive intake of frozen
food
has many downsides.
For instance
, nowadays,
people
having
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many health issues
such
as heart attack at younger
age
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ages
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, obesity, stomach problems you name it.
Nevertheless
, if we talk about obesity
then
out of 100, 80
people
are facing
this
issue
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the current time and there is only one reason
that is
an unhealthy diet plan, having a large amount of oily
food
, cheesy
food
and so on.
Moreover
, fast
food
not only impacts
individuals
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individuals'
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health but
also
it
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affected
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societies.
To conclude
, considering above mentioned points it is evident that,
although
convenience
food
is easy to find and affordable it has various fatty acids which cause unhealthiness. I believe
,
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traditional foods
is
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always better to have which contain many benefits.
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coherence and cohesion
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task response
The essay partially addresses the task by discussing the negative effects of the replacement of traditional foods by fast food, but the ideas are not fully developed and lack complexity. A more balanced and elaborated response is needed to fully address the prompt.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • globalization
  • nutrient-rich
  • bonding
  • local cuisine
  • fast food chains
  • convenience
  • processed ingredients
  • sustainability
  • culinary traditions
  • mass-produced
  • environmental degradation
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