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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects.

#people #students #study #science #food #school #time #subjects
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In general I don't think about
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 befor, becouse in our country in our
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 we do
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 everyday for parents. But today we have different
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 and we use other way: fastfood, semi-fabric food and other.
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 of all I not sure it is good or not, but i think all people want now how make nice food for they body at home: what product use, what
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 need for
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 and other. Secondary, what students should
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 lessons? If some people want be physics or math or some
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 why they need
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 science of food? Even more, they have enaugh question about other disciplin and
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 part want be prefer for them. Of course if some student
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 restoraunt busness or phisical trainig they need now how
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 work. Or if some students have lot off free
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 they can
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 topik. In conclusion, on my opinion: all people won a now what they wont a do in kitchen but not in
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 for other questions. Maybe it is good idea for school.
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