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Research has shown that spending much less time in office can reduce the use of energy (for example, electricity, gas). Thus, some companies close for some days a week. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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A study revealed that some workplaces should be closed for a few days a week so that employees can spend much less time in the office and minimize the usage of
energy
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 as power, gas and so on. It, indubitably, leads to affect the performance of the
company
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;
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, the merits, which are the development of rural areas and savage of
energy
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resources
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, supersede the demerits. The above development leads to an adverse effect on the outcome of an organization.
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 is because companies work would be stopped for few days in a week and collectively it would be like one complete off week in a month. To exemplify, a multi-national
company
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 experienced a loss of 10% in 2010.
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, the whole productive outcome of any organization will be drastically reduced. Despite
company
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 loss, it will help in the development of rural areas. Since
energy
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 will save during off days of workplaces, as air-conditioners, lifts, lights
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 other electrical equipment will be no longer operating,
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 will help in saving of more power and that electricity can be transferred to the countryside.
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, it will help in less consumption of
energy
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resources
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. The reason behind
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 is less amount of a coal, water required to generate electricity and produce gas, thereby, and non-renewable
resources
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 will be preserved for future generations. A survey disclosed that in the
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 two years consumption of coal in a thermal power plant is reduced from 10 million ton to 7 million ton. To recapitulate,
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 it destructs the outcome of the
company
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, its positive side, owing to the growth of the rural area and saving of natural
resources
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, overshadows the negative side.
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