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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car. Give reasons for your answer.

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The automobile is one of the most useful and yet destructive inventions of the 19th century. Before the appearance of motor vehicle roads most parts of the world were poor.
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, due to the rapidly growing
use
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 of
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cars
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 the streets of every
city
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 in the world are filled with them. Causing chaotic parking, congestions, air pollution, noise and
ruined
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 public
environment
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. For
this
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 reason, we need to consider some options to reduce car
use
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 in the
city
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,
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 as restricting parking,
development
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 of public
transport
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 and building alternative
transport
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 routes. Admittedly, the importance of restricting parking is to avoid congestions and make
transport
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 easier. Since the appearance of
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cars
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, it is comfortable to
use
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 them and go as close as possible to the destination. It can be very hard especially in
city
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 centres with narrow streets
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 because parking
cars
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 can cause congestion or make passage impossible. The restriction is important in historical
city
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 centres where many tourists walk to see the sights.
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, the reduction of
cars
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 can help protect the historical buildings as well. It follows that not enough the restriction of parking, the development of public
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 is
also
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 necessary.
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 may include ticket prices available to the passenger,
clean
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environment
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 for the pleasant trip and
well-organized
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 schedule. A solution could be to have car parks in the outer districts of cities where passengers could continue their journey by public
transport
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. In
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case
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 more people are travelling in the same vehicle,
it
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 can cause crowds on buses and can
also
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 be dangerous especially lately due to the pandemic.
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, it is safe by observing travel rules and ensuring hygienic conditions.
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, the answer might be to develop alternative
transport
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 routes, as bicycle lanes. Many people choose to
use
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 bicycles for transportation, which can be dangerous between
cars
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. With appropriate
planning
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 more people will choose bicycles over public
transport
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. It is good for the
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;
less
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 vehicles means less air pollution.
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, it is an excellent way of activity too. As can be seen, the reduction of car
use
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 can have a positive effect in towns, as
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 vehicles go into the
city
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 centres, the towns can protect their buildings and the
environment
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 from the noise, air pollution and congestion. The development of public
transport
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 and the expansion of cycle paths open up new opportunities for cleaner and more enjoyable cities.
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