Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think they should stay at home with the family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Parental care and support
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essential during childhood.
However
, these days many
children
, rarely, stay with their
parents
as they have a busy work-life and early schooling.
This
scenario may have some repercussions
such
as behavioural changes and poor academic performance. On one hand, these days most of the
parents
have full-time jobs to maintain financial
stablity
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stability
and provide better facilities to the family.
Therefore
, the offsprings are
nutured
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nurtured
by either
grantparents
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grandparents
or baby sitters so they are rarely
attented
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attended
and cared
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their
parents
.
Similarly
, since schooling starts at 2-3 years of
thechild
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the child
, eventually, opportunities to stay with
parents
cut off from
then
.
For example
, it has been seen
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families, especially, in developing countries.These two incidents contribute to
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a feeling of
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and other psychological trauma. On other hand, as the younger ones feel the neglect, causes other problems. The main one is that they
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find love and affection from outsiders often through online friends. The relationship will end up in
abusive
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and exploiting nature
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if the friend is a potential predator.
As a result
, the students often show some kinds of behavioural changes
such
as anxiety and panic
attaks
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attacks
and they tend to have poor grades in
classroom
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.
For instance
, many
children
browse
internet
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the internet
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as a method of distraction from their worries, but these vulnerable may be
expoited
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exploited
.
This
situation could have been prevented
,
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if they had been closely monitored. In conclusion,
children
often stay away from family either due to early schooling and
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status of
parents
,
this
may create some psychological and academic impacts on
children
.
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