How widely do you think the problem spreads that people spend too much time on work than their personal life and experience time shortage? What problems it cause?
Recently It has been observed that most of the population spending most of their
time
on work. They have not much time
to share with their immediate family members. It leads to many problems such
as relationship and health related
. Add a hyphen
health-related
This
essay will discuss causes in forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, In this
contemporary era, people working overhours
to complete the project before Correct your spelling
over hours
deadline
. Even, they Add an article
the deadline
also
attend office on weekends to avoid delay in submission
of their assignment. Correct article usage
the submission
Hence
, they cannot share quality time
with near and dears. For instance
, In India, a survey conducted in which found that divorce suits are increasing due to this
. It is necessary to give time
to families.
Furthermore
, People who spend much of time
sitting in offices are likely to face health issues Correct pronoun usage
their time
likewise
Correct your spelling
back pain
backpain
, vision impairment, depression and many more. For evidence, In America a survey conducted in which concluded that 80% Correct your spelling
back pain
workers
who overtime at Change preposition
of workers
job
suffered Correct article usage
the job
with
medical issues as compared to their other colleagues. Change the preposition
from
However
, people must have valuable time
to themselves doing yoga, join gym
and exercise. It will definitely beneficial for employees.
To conclude, providing too much Correct article usage
the gym
time
at workplace
may lead to various issues regarding relationship and health. It can be remedied by sharing Correct article usage
the workplace
time
with loved ones. Overtime at workplaces also
lead
to obesity and stress.Change the verb form
leads
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