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Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree?

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 kinds of people.
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, the crime rate
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statistics
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defendant
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, these kinds of
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 have a chance to
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any unlawful act. To conclude, the developed
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countries
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prisoner
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contries
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countries
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person
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are insist
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 to do change to the law against
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 and peaceful nation
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 juries are should be given all the past data
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 the culprit when before taking
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 about the case.
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