Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that crime rates have dramatically increased over the

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few years. Some criminals can manage themselves to become good human beings while their stay in prisons. One of the main reasons is that they have practically seen the problems and sacrifice they had to make.

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crimes in teenagers. I personally agree with the statement and the following essay will discuss

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ex-prisoners, but not all of them have a bad personality.

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, it is the duty of the government and the

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in teenagers. After that, there should be workshop and seminars which should enhance the consequences of committing

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, due to the experiences obtained as long as running punishment, they seem to become

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to tell the teens about the difficulties that might be faced when living in a prison.

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good citizens through the ex-culprit experience.

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society and would be glad for doing something good. In ,addition, alternative ways of educating

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students would treat those as class lectures, not the

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culprit. To conclude, irrefutably we should hate misdeed, not the lawbreaker as they are

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the human being and we should educate our younger generation about the consequences of accomplishing misdeed and I

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from their experience.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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