Some people believe that the government should provide financial assistance to all artists including painters, musicians and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both points of views and give your opinion

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Whilst providing monetary help to artists is both supported and opposed by the public. Notwithstanding some merits of the former view, my opinion is that the legislative body should not directly involve in financially helping any specific section of society. Explicated below are my perspectives on both the views and the basis of my belief.
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sector may have perceptible benefits of motivating the new generation towards
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of the industry but it lacks the contention that it may create
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sense of negligence towards other industry. For
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as shop owners, drivers and many more constitute the
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grade sector and it may develop a feeling
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ignorance by the government in offering aid to them.
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, direct monetary help should not be involved for any specific part of society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial assistance
  • government funding
  • cultural enrichment
  • creative projects
  • cultural heritage
  • national identity
  • economic benefits
  • thriving arts communities
  • market forces
  • essential services
  • public money
  • dependence
  • innovation
  • corruption
  • inefficiency
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