8.D. In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by the international fast food. This is having negative effect on our families and societies. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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these days
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the
fast
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food
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instead
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traditional
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effect on the people and in the societies.In my opinion,I completely agree with
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increased
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home
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prepared
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hotest
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seller in
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, it was imported by international
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countries
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people enjoying
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it on daily
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. On the other side, eating
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causing many side effects in their regular life.It may
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the energy levels in
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blood flow changes will occur,
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health
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good amount
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required
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the
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receipts
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different.For instances,In
current
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market so many instant products are available which takes less time to
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prepare
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a health
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difficulties
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future
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it's not a good and quality of
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taken by
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body. In conclusion, humans are attracted by
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fast
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food
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where it consumes less time period to
perpared
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prepare
prepared
and
eat
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, with
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number
protients
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patients
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future
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furture
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they
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alot
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a lot
of health problems in their day to day life.In my opinion, I agree It is
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negative
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impact
on
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future
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generations
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