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Some people think that competitive sports have positive effects on teenager education, while others argue that effect is negative. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Nobody would dispute the fact that all teenagers need to have a healthy life by doing sports.But some people think that youngsters should not play
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 game because it can harm them.While others think that competitive sport
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 as football has a positive effect on children.I reckon that all teenagers should do sports and sometimes they can play competitively.In
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 sport as football or basketball
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 a lot of advantages.To be honest, it can be really hard to play in the team and you can have a misconception about your team players.But if you learn how to work in a group and have good communication and mutual understanding skills it might help you in future.I reckon that people will use these skills in their future work.
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 employees need to do projects in big groups.
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, rival games can be more entertaining and more interesting than playing alone.
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 a negative effect on children.Generally, competitive games end with anger from the ones who
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 which can lead to fighting.In my childhood, I used to cry after I lost the game and it could somehow affect my nervous system because after playing I always was embarrassed and stressed. To sum up, competitive spots are very useful and we can learn a lot from them but we should teach youngsters how to adjust to the loss and do not show anger.
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 sport from a certain year of birth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • teamwork
  • growth mindset
  • sense of responsibility
  • manage success and failure
  • undue pressure
  • emphasize
  • winning at all costs
  • cheating
  • aggression
  • physical and emotional burnout
  • integration
  • social cohesion
  • diverse group of peers
  • encouraging empathy
  • hyper-competitive
  • overshadows
  • joy and love for the game
  • healthy and enjoyable activity
  • stressful obligation
  • means to an end
  • promote a balanced approach
  • competition is healthy
  • sportsmanship
  • valued above victory
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