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Planting trees is very important .some people say that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others says that housing facilities should be build instead. what is youropinion?

#trees #people #areas #cities #town #facilities #youropinion
As per the growing population, the countries need
land
 for building houses and it should be ensured that only
limited
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 amount of deforestation is done for building colonies and the available barren
land
 is utilized for planting
trees
 so living beings have fresh air to breathe in. Let us delve deeper to discuss more
about
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it in the upcoming paragraph. In the
fast moving
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 world, humans have
became
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 materialistic and
hence
 to earn profit they destroy nature by cutting
of
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trees
 and building factories, housing colonies to earn profit.
This
 havoc of deforestation done by humans will cost people in future when they will have to buy oxygen cylinders to get fresh air.
Hence
, the real estate agents should ensure that they build housing boards
areas
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 with plenty of
trees
 and almost all of the vacant
land
 is being utilized to grow plants.
On the other hand
,
as
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the countries like China, India, United States have large growth of population and there is
shortage
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a shortage
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 of
land
 in the cities.
Thus
, they have no choice
then
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 to utilize the
land
 to
maximum
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 of
there
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their
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 need.
Hence
, they chop
of
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 the
trees
 to build flats so that more people can avail the benefits of staying in the city. In a nutshell, it is of no doubt people need a place to reside in a city to enjoy the benefits
such
 as of schools, jobs, transportation
etcetra
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etcetera
.
On the other hand
, the number of
trees
 that are brought down, the same number or more saplings should be planted in the outskirts of the city or either alongside
of
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the roads so the air quality index s not
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effected
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