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News media is important in our society. Why is it so important? Do you think its influence is generally positive or negative?

It is an irrefutable fact that
news
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media
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 is a vital element of a functional and growing society. It helps in creating awareness and generating opinions for the upliftment and development on issues of social, cultural, and
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national importance.
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, I believe
media
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 has
largely
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 beneficial impact on
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society
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 to negligible detrimental effect. In
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 paragraphs, both views will be analyzed. To commence with, the main reason to view
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 as
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 part of the community is because of the fact that newspapers,
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, digital platforms and magazines act as a collaborative voice of the people that ask relevant questions, and
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 seeking
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 from the incumbent government, which eventually keeps the federal state in check with people’s feedback.
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, many individuals act as
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 journalist to amplify local issues on social
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 platforms eventually keeping local people’s representative vigilant about the problems and act
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 to resolve them.
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,
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 organizations
supports
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spreading vital facts and information that helps citizens to make responsible choices.
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 development in
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 industry, any warning to
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 for while buying some electronic gadget for use.
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,
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 has helped the world in many more ways than one.
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, there are some negatives of
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 on the regional community as well.
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propagation
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 of fake information in abundance,
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incite riots, maligning
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 of the innocent victim, developing sensational facts that
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 specific propaganda attached to it.
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, Some
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 channels newspapers cook up false information to divert
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 of the people from the main topic.
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 more harm to
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society than improving as a whole. In conclusion,
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news
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 is essential to generate awareness and simultaneously invoke opinions.
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result
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, keeps
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 in check and
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, there are some negative attributes of
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 as well, but could be rectified through scrutinizing instruments of the law.
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, by and large, influence is positive.

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