The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
INFORMATION CONCERNING HOW THE EXPENDITURE OF A SCHOOL IN THE UK CHANGES ACROSS THE YEARS 1981, 1991 AND 2001 IS DEPICTED IN THE GIVEN PIE CHARTS.
OVERALL
, WHAT IS NOTABLE IS THAT, IN EACH OF THE YEARS, THE CATEGORY WHICH RECEIVED MORE FUNDING THAN ANY OTHER WAS
TEACHER'S
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TEACHERS'
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SALARIES
,
WHEREAS
THE SMALLEST AMOUNT OF MONEY WENT TOWARD INSURANCE. AS PER THE CHART, FROM 1981 TO 1991, TEACHERS'
SALARIES
GREW BY 10% TO ACCOUNT FOR HALF OF ALL SPENDING.
IN CONTRAST
, NON-TEACHING
PERSONELS'
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PERSONNEL'
SALARIES
FELL FROM 28% TO JUST OVER A FIFTH (22%) IN THE GIVEN PERIOD. 30% OF THE EXPENSES WAS DIVIDED EQUALLY BETWEEN RESOURCES AND FURNITURE AND EQUIPMENT, BUT THE FORMER'S SHARE INCREASED BY 5% IN 1991,
WHILE
THE LATTER'S DROPPED BY 1O) PER CENT. THE BUDGET ALLOCATED FOR INSURANCE INCREASED NEGLIGIBLY FROM 2 PERCENTAGE POINTS TO ONLY 3%. BETWEEN 1991 AND 2001, THE BUDGET RATE ALLOCATED FOR INSURANCE AND FURNITURE AND EQUIPMENT ROSE BY 5% AND 15%, RESPECTIVELY.
THIS
TREND IS
OPPOSITE
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IN THE CASE OF TEACHING AND NON-TEACHING STAFF
SALARIES
AND RESOURCES WHERE
ITS
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FUNDING DECLINED AT A RANGE OF 5 AND 11 PERCENTAGE POINTS.
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  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
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