" Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures

It is better to prevent
diseases
than
waiting
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them to be cured when they already entered our body and putting money
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preventive measurement is
also
cheaper than researching and treating
diseases
. I fully agree with those statements because of two main reasons, and I will try to elaborate
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Firstly
,
world
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the world
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always evolves, from technology, human, animals, plants, and
diseases
.
That is
the
first
reason why I agree, because human
diseases
are
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also
evolve, and it makes them
to
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always create new
diseases
that need to be tackled in the future.
For instance
,
COVID-19
, the virus that kills many people, is one of the viruses that has not yet prevented in the past. Until now,
COVID-19
still become a dangerous virus to us, and I believe if we researched that in the past and
government
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put a lot of investment in the research,
COVID-19
can be prevented. The
second
reason is
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reality, medication treatment is far more expensive compare to the prevention initiative. I believe those are the main reason why all the countries develop many vaccines (Hepatitis, and now
COVID-19
).
For instance
, at present, all the countries are competing to deliver
COVID-19
vaccines as quickly as possible because the loss caused by
COVID-19
is far more expensive than the
cost
of production and research. I think all the countries already realize that investment in research and development for the upcoming
diseases
is less than the
cost
when we face the
diseases
themselves. To conclude,
world
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is always evolving, including
diseases
, and the fact that prevention
cost
is less than treatment
cost
makes me fully agree with those arguments.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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