" Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures

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It is better to prevent

diseases

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than

waiting

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them to be cured when they already entered our body and putting money

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into

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preventive measurement is

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cheaper than researching and treating

diseases

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. I fully agree with those statements because of two main reasons, and I will try to elaborate

them

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on them

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this

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essay.

Firstly

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world

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the world

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always evolves, from technology, human, animals, plants, and

diseases

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the

first

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reason why I agree, because human

diseases

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are

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also evolve

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also

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evolve, and it makes them

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apply

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always create new

diseases

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that need to be tackled in the future.

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COVID-19

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, the virus that kills many people, is one of the viruses that has not yet prevented in the past. Until now,

COVID-19

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still become a dangerous virus to us, and I believe if we researched that in the past and

government

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the government

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put a lot of investment in the research,

COVID-19

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can be prevented. The

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reason is

because

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reality, medication treatment is far more expensive compare to the prevention initiative. I believe those are the main reason why all the countries develop many vaccines (Hepatitis, and now

COVID-19

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, at present, all the countries are competing to deliver

COVID-19

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vaccines as quickly as possible because the loss caused by

COVID-19

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is far more expensive than the

cost

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of production and research. I think all the countries already realize that investment in research and development for the upcoming

diseases

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is less than the

cost

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when we face the

diseases

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themselves. To conclude,

world

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the world

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is always evolving, including

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, and the fact that prevention

cost

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is less than treatment

cost

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makes me fully agree with those arguments.

Albert MercubuonoThu May 13 2021

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

275 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

proactive
preventive measures
lifestyle diseases
public health
healthcare expenditure
cost-effective
chronic conditions
early detection
immunization
health promotion
risk factors
non-communicable diseases
disease surveillance
preventive diagnostics
health literacy
universal healthcare
primary prevention
secondary prevention
tertiary prevention

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" Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures

Your opinion

Somez people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. Others argue that this money should be spent on sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many people leave their home country to study abroad nowadays. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

More and more tasks we do at home and at work these day are done by robots. Is this a positive or negative development?

Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Other believe that there are health benefits to living in cities.