Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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CONTROVERSY EXISTS WHETHER THE YOUTH SHOULD CONFORM

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THE CONVENTIONAL NORMS OF SOCIETY OR

WHETEHER

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WHETHER

THEY SHOULD,

INSTEAD

, BE GIVEN THE LIBERTY TO ACT AND EXPRESS THEIR OWN INDIVIDUALITY. IN

THIS

ESSSAY

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ESSAY

, I WILL DISCUSS THE GIVEN VIEWPOINTS AND EXPLAIN MY

SUPPPORT

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SUPPORT

FOR THE LATTER.

TO BEGIN

WITH, CONFORMITY FOR OLDFANGLED

WAYS

OF LIVING IS ADVOCATED FOR SEVERAL REASONS.

FIRSTLY

, THEY OPINE THAT MOST YOUNGSTERS THESE DAYS ARE LACKING

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VIRTUES

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THE VIRTUES

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OF LIFE.

FOR INSTANCE

, AS OPPOSE TO THE CHILDREN OF THE PAST WHO WERE APPARENTLY RESPECTFUL, COMPASSIONATE AND LAW ABIDERS, AN INCREASING NUMBER OF JUVENILE DELINQUENTS IS A TREND OF THE MODERN WORLD.

THIS

COULD HAVE NOT HAPPENED SHOULD THE TRADITIONAL

WAYS

WERE STRICTLY IMPOSED FOR THE RISING GENERATIONS TO FOLLOW.

ON THE OTHER HAND

, PROPONENTS OF EMPOWERING YOUNGSTERS TO BE THEIR OWN VERSION POINTS OUT THE FOLLOWING.

FIRSTLY

THIS

INIATIVE

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INITIATIVE

WOULD ENABLE ONE TO BECOME CONFIDENT OF THEMSELVES. WHEN A CHILD IS RESTRICTED TO CONVENTIONAL RULES AND REGULATION, HE FAILS TO SEE OTHER OPTIONS THAT COULD, IN ONE WAY OR ANOTHER,

DEVELOPE

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DEVELOP

HIS INDIVIDUALITY.

FOR EXAMPLE

, IN THE MIDDLE EAST, TRADITIONALLY, AS YOUNG LADIES ARE LIMITED TO DO HOUSEHOLD CHORES ALONE AND THAT MOST OF THEIR CHOICES ARE DECIDED BY THEIR MALE

GUARDIA

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GUARDIANS

GUARDIAN

, MOST WOMEN ARE AFRAID OF MAKING EVEN A SIMPLE DECISION EVEN WHEN GIVEN THE FULL REIGN TO DECIDE FOR HERSELF.

ADDITIONALLY

, YOUTHS WHO ARE UNRESTRAINED TO EXPRESS THEMSELVES MATURE TO BECOME PRO-THINKERS,

AS A RESULT

, INGENUITY COMES OUT NATURALLY FROM THEM. A GOOD EXAMPLE

FOR

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THESE ARE THE MODERN INVENTORS WHO BEND ALL SORTS OF TRADITIONAL

WAYS

AND THINKING BEFORE

SUCESSFULLY

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SUCCESSFULLY

DISCOVERING THE PRODUCTS OF

THEH

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THE

MODERN MINDS

SUCH

AS CELLPHONES, COMPUTERS, THE INTERNET AND THE LIST CONTINUES. IN MY OPINION, LIBERTY AT THE DISPOSAL OF THE RISING GENERATION PAVES THE WAY FOR A MORE AMBITIOUS AND FORWARD

THIKING

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THINKING

INDIVIDUALS AND SO

THEREFORE

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THIS

MUST BE IMPLEMENTED IN THE GLOBAL SOCIETY. TO RECAPITULATE, WHILE SOME BELIEVE THAT

TRADIONAL

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TRADITIONAL

WAYS

SHOULD REMAIN AS THE PARAMETER FOR

YOUNSTER

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YOUNGSTER

YOUNGSTERS

TO FOLLOW IN THE

TODAYS

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SOCIETY, I BELIEVE THAT FREEDOM FOR INDIVIDUAL EXPRESSION SHOULD OBSERVE AT PRESENT.

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Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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