Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

CONTROVERSY EXISTS WHETHER THE YOUTH SHOULD CONFORM
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THE CONVENTIONAL NORMS OF SOCIETY OR
WHETEHER
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WHETHER
THEY SHOULD,
INSTEAD
, BE GIVEN THE LIBERTY TO ACT AND EXPRESS THEIR OWN INDIVIDUALITY. IN
THIS
ESSSAY
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ESSAY
, I WILL DISCUSS THE GIVEN VIEWPOINTS AND EXPLAIN MY
SUPPPORT
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SUPPORT
FOR THE LATTER.
TO BEGIN
WITH, CONFORMITY FOR OLDFANGLED
WAYS
OF LIVING IS ADVOCATED FOR SEVERAL REASONS.
FIRSTLY
, THEY OPINE THAT MOST YOUNGSTERS THESE DAYS ARE LACKING
OF
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VIRTUES
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THE VIRTUES
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OF LIFE.
FOR INSTANCE
, AS OPPOSE TO THE CHILDREN OF THE PAST WHO WERE APPARENTLY RESPECTFUL, COMPASSIONATE AND LAW ABIDERS, AN INCREASING NUMBER OF JUVENILE DELINQUENTS IS A TREND OF THE MODERN WORLD.
THIS
COULD HAVE NOT HAPPENED SHOULD THE TRADITIONAL
WAYS
WERE STRICTLY IMPOSED FOR THE RISING GENERATIONS TO FOLLOW.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, PROPONENTS OF EMPOWERING YOUNGSTERS TO BE THEIR OWN VERSION POINTS OUT THE FOLLOWING.
FIRSTLY
,
THIS
INIATIVE
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INITIATIVE
WOULD ENABLE ONE TO BECOME CONFIDENT OF THEMSELVES. WHEN A CHILD IS RESTRICTED TO CONVENTIONAL RULES AND REGULATION, HE FAILS TO SEE OTHER OPTIONS THAT COULD, IN ONE WAY OR ANOTHER,
DEVELOPE
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DEVELOP
HIS INDIVIDUALITY.
FOR EXAMPLE
, IN THE MIDDLE EAST, TRADITIONALLY, AS YOUNG LADIES ARE LIMITED TO DO HOUSEHOLD CHORES ALONE AND THAT MOST OF THEIR CHOICES ARE DECIDED BY THEIR MALE
GUARDIA
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GUARDIANS
GUARDIAN
, MOST WOMEN ARE AFRAID OF MAKING EVEN A SIMPLE DECISION EVEN WHEN GIVEN THE FULL REIGN TO DECIDE FOR HERSELF.
ADDITIONALLY
, YOUTHS WHO ARE UNRESTRAINED TO EXPRESS THEMSELVES MATURE TO BECOME PRO-THINKERS,
AS A RESULT
, INGENUITY COMES OUT NATURALLY FROM THEM. A GOOD EXAMPLE
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THESE ARE THE MODERN INVENTORS WHO BEND ALL SORTS OF TRADITIONAL
WAYS
AND THINKING BEFORE
SUCESSFULLY
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SUCCESSFULLY
DISCOVERING THE PRODUCTS OF
THEH
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THE
MODERN MINDS
SUCH
AS CELLPHONES, COMPUTERS, THE INTERNET AND THE LIST CONTINUES. IN MY OPINION, LIBERTY AT THE DISPOSAL OF THE RISING GENERATION PAVES THE WAY FOR A MORE AMBITIOUS AND FORWARD
THIKING
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THINKING
INDIVIDUALS AND SO
THEREFORE
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,
THIS
MUST BE IMPLEMENTED IN THE GLOBAL SOCIETY. TO RECAPITULATE, WHILE SOME BELIEVE THAT
TRADIONAL
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TRADITIONAL
WAYS
SHOULD REMAIN AS THE PARAMETER FOR
YOUNSTER
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YOUNGSTER
YOUNGSTERS
TO FOLLOW IN THE
TODAYS
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SOCIETY, I BELIEVE THAT FREEDOM FOR INDIVIDUAL EXPRESSION SHOULD OBSERVE AT PRESENT.
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