Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying past history can help us better understand the present. Please discuss both views and give your opinion.

carbon
produced [emission],
government
need[s] to take actions.
For instance
,
government
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should make [create/pass]
a
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apply
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strict
regulations
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regulation
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to limit the [amount of
carbon
produced]
carbon
producer. If they produce
carbon
more than the limit [threshold], they need [are required] to pay
certain
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amount of money to the
government
some amount
of
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money . [
Otherwise
] or the
government
can
also
close the business if they break [violate] the regulations
in
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several times.
This
initiative will scare [deter] the businesses and remind [encourage] them to maintain [sustain] our environment For [In terms of]
water
quality, I believe [it is] mostly caused by all the waste that [are] thrown [in]to the sea. Companies know that throwing
stuffs
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to
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into
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water
is free, and they do not get any negative consequences because of that, so they will always do that. Again,
government
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ought to develop more regulations regarding waste management.
For instance
, companies should obey that all the waste that produced need to be recycled, no matter what. If not, regulators will shut down the business. Not only the initiative help[s] to increase
water
quality, [but
also
] the companies will be more sustain [sustainable] because they are using recycled products. To conclude,
government
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should play a major part to decrease air and
water
pollution. If not, I do not think we can properly
breath
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and drink in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights
  • progression
  • values
  • beliefs
  • heritage
  • identity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • subjective
  • practical
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