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Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying past history can help us better understand the present. Please discuss both views and give your opinion.

carbon
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 produced [emission],
government
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 need[s] to take actions.
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,
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government
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the government
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 should make [create/pass]
a
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apply
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strict
regulations
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regulation
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 to limit the [amount of
carbon
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 produced]
carbon
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 producer. If they produce
carbon
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 more than the limit [threshold], they need [are required] to pay
certain
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a certain
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 amount of money to the
government
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 some amount
of
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apply
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money . [
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] or the
government
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 can
also
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 close the business if they break [violate] the regulations
in
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several times.
This
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 initiative will scare [deter] the businesses and remind [encourage] them to maintain [sustain] our environment For [In terms of]
water
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 quality, I believe [it is] mostly caused by all the waste that [are] thrown [in]to the sea. Companies know that throwing
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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to
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into
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water
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 is free, and they do not get any negative consequences because of that, so they will always do that. Again,
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government
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the government
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 ought to develop more regulations regarding waste management.
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, companies should obey that all the waste that produced need to be recycled, no matter what. If not, regulators will shut down the business. Not only the initiative help[s] to increase
water
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 quality, [but
also
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] the companies will be more sustain [sustainable] because they are using recycled products. To conclude,
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government
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the government
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 should play a major part to decrease air and
water
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 pollution. If not, I do not think we can properly
breath
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breathe
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 and drink in the future.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights
  • progression
  • values
  • beliefs
  • heritage
  • identity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • subjective
  • practical
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