Nowadays young people mostly learn by reading books or watching movies and TV shows ,rather than personal experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Recently, young people acquire knowledge majorly through viewing films, television programmes and they
also
read books
instead
of learning by private
experience
.
This
essay totally agrees with
this
notion because
such
modes of learning are becoming more rampant and there are numerous things that could be learnt there rather than learning from their personal
experience
. The
first
and foremost reason why these young generations learn by other means
instead
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learning through private
experience
is that there are more ways of acquiring knowledge, which has become
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commonplace.
This
is because
experiences
can be gained through stories in
novela
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novels
, scripts acted in movies and on different TV shows.
For example
,
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carried out
on
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on a group of high school students revealed that 90% of these learners gained health knowledge through a particular cinema watched as they learnt that it is important to keep fit and prevent obesity through
story
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of a woman in the film.
As a result
,most of them determined to watch what
thwy
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they
consume and they determined to physically keep fit through
healthy
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diet.
Secondly
, different activities abound on various TV programmes and film,which could serve as a lesson for these young ones. They have different options of learning and there are loads of
experiences
to learn from
therefore
, they do not need to wait till they use their private
experience
before they can learn as they shape their lives through numerous
experiences
they have encountered.
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, interview conducted on some groups of learners
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that they look forward to achieving
experiences
from others through reading stories and watching films .
Consequently
,
this
has prevented them from making terrible mistakes, which could result in learning through their personal
experience
. In conclusion, I completely agree that young people learn by watching movies, reading books and through shows on television rather than using what they
experience
to achieve learning since other means are now commonplace and there are several
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to gain from
such
modes of learning.
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