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Some believe that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, while others claim that holding the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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The diagrams display a movie theatre transform between 1980 and current. According to the figures, it seems that there are more facilities than the previous days and some areas have been dismissed.
To begin
 with cinema facilities, there was a cinema 1 west bottom of the corner in 1980.
However
, it removes into the middle west.
Moreover
, there was a large space for
the
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cinema 2 in the middle east in 1980, while it became half a size small and it is located in the top west corner.
Furthermore
, there are constructed new cinemas 3, 4, 5 which are located on the east side of the area. The other facilities
such
 as ticket and drinks stations remained and the drinks station has expanded into food and drink stations.
In addition
, there are relax room and DVD shops at the bottom of the district.
Nonetheless
, Car park at the top of the area was destroyed and the toilet is still in the same place.
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