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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Due to the rapid increase in technology and ,
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population
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we are directly affecting nature.
This
 essay will discuss the causes for imbalance in flora and fauna and
also
 how governments and individuals can overcome
such
 issues.
Firstly
 , The earth is the only planet where
people
 can survive.There are many factors that causing damage to its natural habitat. Here, I will put forward 2 major environmental hazard activities are Air and water pollution.
Although
 , industrialisation is an indication of development and growth, the harmful fumes from factories,carbon monoxide from vehicles and crop burning hitting the atmosphere badly.In Delhi, the pollution level is sky-rocketed
such
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public has to install an air purifier in their home and can't breathe freely.
Besides
 , the expelling of waste in open resulting in water pollution.
Moreover
 , the ocean became the sewage pond where every waste is disposed
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Furthermore
 , In Alaska, due to poisonous water from crude oil ,ships a big number of whales and aquatic animals are affected and giving their lives.
Thus
 ,Proper disposal of waste management has to be developed
such
 it won't impact other lives.
Secondly
 , There are governments schemes employed from past centuries to overcome
such
 damages to the surrounding.
Nevertheless
 ,
Even
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 more awareness and education have to be penetrated among
people
 and
has
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 to encourage to plant trees and subsidise on eco-friendly products.
In addition
 , Every being is equally responsible for the goodwill of the environment and make mankind more liveable.For doing so, each individual has to feel responsible and has to maintain their street or locality tidy.
Also
 , make learn there children about the importance of nature.
However
 , minimising the usage of vehicles, using eco-friendly items,recycling etc are some activities which
people
 should adopt and take
further
 . In conclusion, the Survival of mankind is equally important as maintaining eco-balance.henceforth,ruling nations have to bring more reforms and cultivate
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greener area of forests to equalise the global warmth.Whereas, Every being is a soldier of their own planet and have to save from calamities. Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual
people
 do?
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