Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often
arged
that the nations with a Correct your spelling
argued
proloned
working Correct your spelling
prolonged
time
will get more prosperous rather than a few hours
working time
countries. I strongly disagree with this
statement because overlonged
working Correct your spelling
overlong
time
do
not measure the Change the verb form
does
nation
wealth compared to the many factors Replace the word
national
such
as Technology
and people
's quality
of life
I think these two factors are determined.
To begin
with, the most important consideration is the
Correct article usage
apply
Technology
. This
means nowadays the most companies are used modern machineries
in order to Change the wording
machinery
types of machinery
pieces of machinery
their
reduce the number of workers and they invest more machinery rather than Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
because the machinery can work
without taking break and speed. It can lead to get
more productivity even employee not working expanded Change the verb form
getting
time
while the enterprise can get more benefit such
as profit, a large number of production. For instance
, with the introduction of modern technology
machinery system in Wulanssi Organaisation
in Germany, both the employer and employees have gained mutual benefits. While the employee Correct your spelling
Organization
enjoy
fewer working Change the verb form
enjoys
hours
per day and the organaisation
can generate Correct your spelling
organisation
organization
higher
amount of Add an article
a higher
quality
products on a daily basics
.
Correct the article-noun agreement
daily basic
Moreover
, the
another reason is Remove the article
apply
people
's quality
of life
. This
means the labour health life
is most important rather than prolonged working time
because the labour is the blood of every enterprise. In other words
, the low level
Add a hyphen
low-level
people
in the organisation might get stress and depression due to overlonged
practice Correct your spelling
overlong
as a result
, this
trend will affect the productivity of the industry. While the member of staff can not focus on their job as a result
, this
will affect the quality
of the product therefore
, the country welfare Add the comma(s)
,therefore
is not only decide
the working Change the verb form
is not only decided
hours
but also
the people
's quality
of life
. For example
, some European countries such
as Sweden and Finland value work
Add a hyphen
work-life
life
balance the workers of these countries work
the fewest hours
per day amoung
all nations around the world, they have Correct your spelling
among
higher
gross domestic product. The family Add an article
a higher
the higher
time
and social life
people
enjoy after work
provide them with sufficient time
to rejuvenate therefore
, they experience less work
strain.
To conclude, the saying that longer working hours
can lead to higher revenue is a misconception. I believe that with the development of technology
and work
-life
balance can be assured of more economic successful
.Replace the word
success
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