Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often
arged
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argued
that the nations with a
proloned
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prolonged
working
time
will get more prosperous rather than a few
hours
working
time
countries. I strongly disagree with
this
statement because
overlonged
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overlong
working
time
do
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not measure the
nation
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wealth compared to the many factors
such
as
Technology
and
people
's
quality
of
life
I think these two factors are determined.
To begin
with, the most important consideration is
the
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Technology
.
This
means nowadays the most companies are used modern
machineries
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machinery
types of machinery
pieces of machinery
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in order to
their
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reduce the number of workers and they invest more machinery rather than
people
because the machinery can
work
without taking break and speed. It can lead to
get
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more productivity even employee not working expanded
time
while the enterprise can get more benefit
such
as profit, a large number of production.
For instance
, with the introduction of modern
technology
machinery system in Wulanssi
Organaisation
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Organization
in Germany, both the employer and employees have gained mutual benefits. While the employee
enjoy
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fewer working
hours
per day and the
organaisation
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organisation
organization
can generate
higher
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amount of
quality
products on
a daily basics
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.
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,
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another reason is
people
's
quality
of
life
.
This
means the labour health
life
is most important rather than prolonged working
time
because the labour is the blood of every enterprise.
In other words
, the
low level
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people
in the organisation might get stress and depression due to
overlonged
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overlong
practice
as a result
,
this
trend will affect the productivity of the industry. While the member of staff can not focus on their job
as a result
,
this
will affect the
quality
of the product
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, the country welfare
is not only decide
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the working
hours
but
also
the
people
's
quality
of
life
.
For example
, some European countries
such
as Sweden and Finland value
work
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life
balance the workers of these countries
work
the fewest
hours
per day
amoung
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among
all nations around the world, they have
higher
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gross domestic product. The family
time
and social
life
people
enjoy after
work
provide them with sufficient
time
to rejuvenate
therefore
, they experience less
work
strain. To conclude, the saying that longer working
hours
can lead to higher revenue is a misconception. I believe that with the development of
technology
and
work
-
life
balance can be assured of more economic
successful
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic success
  • working hours
  • productivity
  • sustainable development
  • work-life balance
  • labor laws
  • efficiency
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • burnout
  • occupational health
  • technological innovation
  • industrialized nations
  • emerging economies
  • workforce
  • competitiveness
  • workplace culture
  • employee turnover
  • quality of life
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